For one final time you may end up liking this?

Hi! This is simply one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read. I can't say it any more clearly. I do have one suggestion though. I don't think you need the final stanza, the final three lines. The reason is that I, personally, feel that you have already depicted that so clearly, beautifully and eloquently in the poem already, you don't need this closing. I would love to see you stop at "That play mysterious games in your fantasy land." That gave me goose bumps, and I don't need any more! Oh, also, one more suggestion! I don't think you need to capitalize the first word in each sentence, when it is a continuation of the prior line and would not be otherwise capitalized, I think it is more informal and yet more elegrant to use small letter. It also gives the poem a more modern look, because they used to follow the "capitalize the first word in the line" very strictly rule in poetry, but they don't any more. But all this is just style and interpretation. For me this is a 10-10-10. I hope it will somehow be published.